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sarcastic, sexy, and sad
she's the kind of girl i swore off years ago
and can't get enough of since
shiney eyes and slow smile hiding a head full of gunpowder
hair like spilled tequila
and a body that whispers "you can't have me"
when i can
she's the kind of girl i swore off years ago
and can't get enough of since
shiney eyes and slow smile hiding a head full of gunpowder
hair like spilled tequila
and a body that whispers "you can't have me"
when i can
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Re: nada
Mon, May 29, 2006 - 11:11 PMI love it. I love the free prose....
I see myself in this.... strange.
May I ask the insipration for this piece?
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Re: nada
Fri, October 13, 2006 - 3:53 PMI think the gunpowder and the tequila are strong images - they pack a punch so to speak.
The first line could be better. I think an image is always better than straightforward adjectives. I want to feel her sarcastic sexy sadness (no, really I do) - don't just throw words at me, you know?
I think it would be stronger if you leave off the last line - even if it is your wife.
Hair like spilled tequila - I love that . . .
